Group Three: Poem 4: Mr Brightside
I love the idea of making an entire poem out of song titles, especially such good songs! I was impressed by how well the poem flowed despite the interruptions of the artists names after each song title. I think it turned out beautifully, with the imagery of different cities to show how they’ve separated since graduation. (continue)
Group Two: Poem #4: It’s Good to Hear From You
This was by far my favorite poem that I’ve read so far in this class! I absolutely love the idea of comprisising a poem completely of text messages. I love how it starts out humoreous, alluding to face tattoos and Justin Bieber being Big Brother. I love how it begins absolutely ridiculous and slowly becomes more serious as it starts describing losing touch with people, to the point where you no longer exchange clever banter but start saying boring things like “I guess you’re too busy…” It’s very relatable as a college student to lose touch with old friends and see your old text messages and miss the sparkle you guys used to have and lost over time and new lives. The part that hit me the most however was the ending part, where the author seems to be apologizing for not being able to keep in touch. You can tell the writer is losing control of their lives and therefore themselves, as they’re failing classes and trying to take time for themselves, and it ends on the heart-stabbingly stark note that they had tried to kill themselves seven times, leaving the reader reeling. It’s so deeply relatable to any college student who’s totally overwhelmed and suicidal, yet still worried about replying to the text messages from the people who used to keep them sane. I absolutely loved this hilarious and dark work.It was absolutely perfect.
Group 2 Poems: Poem 1: Unfailing
I like the opening imagery of the wave kissing the sand no matter how many times it falls away. I like how they describe faithfulness as the way nature interacts. It progresses to further evoke a sense of relentless love, something humans are so envious of. They describe the wave’s love as “relentless, inspiration for commitment”. I also like the repetition of time allusions: “seconds pass, one after another/ never stopping as long as time goes by” to end with “never missing a second of their love”. The time allusions give the reader a greater perspective of how great that love really as, it doesn’t fade with time or lessen at any moment, it doesn’t vary or change, rather it stays constant and continues to push on and fill every single second with love. Overall the poem is quite beautiful and inspirational, but at the same time, somewhat sad because she doesn’t compare it to a love she has or a love she’s seen outside of the ocean and the sand.
Week Three- Poem #5: Poetry
This poem makes me really happy on the inside just because you can really feel the love the author has for his/her art. The way they describe the way the pen glides, the way they talk about talent covering the page, the way they describe “opening up and being yourself”. It gives art a very very beautiful connotation. I also love how it directed towards the reader because it gives the reader inspiration to go out and make something or write something. It’s super creative and awesome writing inspiration!
Week Three- Poem #4: Pressure
This poem was really good because you could really feel the anxiety of the speaker. The title “Pressure” is appropriate because it’s describing the poet’s experience in a close basketball game. The short and somewhat random line breaks gives the reader a sense of tension as they read it. The word usage also conveys a sense of anxiety or being overwhelmed from pressure. For example, the poet specifically uses the words “anxiously” and “pressure” and “buckle” when describing his feelings and emotions of the crowd throughout the short span of time he was describing. You can tell he’s talking about basketball by his word usage of “dribble” and “net”. You can also feel the pressure he feels from the crowd, as he says “for that second the whole crowd’s hearts’ stop” or “the crowd explodes”. You can tell that the poet seeks some kind of approval from the crowd as he says “This is what separates the good from the greats”. That’s how the reader knows for sure that the source of this pressure is not his parents or teammates but himself and pressure he puts on himself to be one of the greats. Overall, it’s very stark and to the point poem that conveys exactly the tone the author was working for.
Week Two- Poem #4: Untitled
This poem is really heavy, but it definitely hits the heart. The poet uses anaphora when she says “I dreamt I saw my mother”, drawing the reader’s attention to the intense feelings she has about her mother. As the poem progresses the tone becomes more and more intense until it finishes with, “And I’m sorry that I cried.” You really can feel the pain she’s bearing from not having a mother around, and it makes the reader really sympathetic for the speaker. This poem is simple and stark, hits the mark perfectly, and can really draw emotion from the reader.
Week Two- Poem #3: On Light Pollution
I really like this poem because it tells the story of Andromeda in a really creative way. I admire the way the poet describes both the constellation and the myth it’s name derived from. I’m assuming in the second stanza when the poet describes Andromeda’s “hands bound to the throne, forever in the night”, he/she is referring to the constellation Andromeda, while the third stanza describing her naked and scared refers to the actual myth in which she’s chained to a rock to be sacrificed for her mother’s boasting. I do wonder however, why the poet doesn’t describe the part of the myth where Andromeda is rescued from being chained? Also, I wonder about the title, “On Light Pollution”. When she says “In a world where myths are kept encoded, Once they roamed free" is she saying that we no longer can see Andromeda’s constellation because of light pollution? Overall, I love the diction and syntax of this entire poem, as well as the interesting and creative matter behind it.
(I didn’t remember everything about Andromeda off the top of my head.)
Poem #5: Freedom
I think this poem is incredibly well-written and conveys a message that always has, and probably always will, ring true. I feel the poet’s pain, I relate to their yearnings of a more genuine, less constrictive society. I love the figurative language and use of color schemes to portray the assault critics and skeptics have on inner beauty and society as a whole. I also love the simplicity of “if only they could look to the outside, and recognize the gardens blooming around their cryptic walls”. If only the crowds were not hollowed out, too focused on their marching to feel their empty hearts, they could look out and see everything they’re ignorant to. It also reminds me of Pink Floyd’s The Wall, making it an instant fav :D
Poem #3: Untitled
I adore this poem, not only for it’s authenticity but for it’s almost stubborn positivity. The last lines, “smile every day, in spite of it all”, hit me the hardest because it’s so genuinely blissful. The poet portrays a sense of courage few people have. The courage to say, ”At the end of day I still have a strange fondness for my life and myself. As fucked up as it is, it’s mine.” And I love him/her for that. While the work was slightly cluttered with cliches, the beliefs that form this poet’s writing are absolutely stellar. I think Untitled could have been much better if the poet had showed more of his/her creativity and gotten a little bit more personal with the readers. Trash the phrases like “cry too frequently” and “wish on stars” and dig in that beautiful mind for things the readers haven’t read a million times. Say, "my mascara leaks too often" or "ask favors from exploded nebulae." I hope to see this artist develop his/her syntax and diction without losing his/her style; I think great things will come from them when they do!