Group 1 and 2
Poem #3: I Listened To Too Much Karl Pilkington And There’s No Going Back (A cry for help/ Plea for understanding)
I very much like this poem even though I had no idea who Karl Pilkington was. I like the way the poet opened up with a Pilkington quote because it gives the reader background information and guides them to the author’s intent. The poet’s meaning is clear, she states that she’s worried about human effect on Earth as they overproduce and pollute the environment. Her worrying about Earth be weighted down by production of big boats, cars, and buildings is founded from Pilkington’s quote at the beginning of the poem, but she developed it further as she says we are already out of orbit and ready to hit the bottom. This poem is beautiful because it brings people’s attention to the awful impact people are making on earth, and calls for a more natural, unimposing existence.
Poem #4: ”Bonnie.”
This poem literally made me cry and want to hug the poet. It describes the plight of having an alcoholic parent who cares more about alcohol than taking care of their child. The poet clearly resents their mother for being this way, but she’s more sad than angry. By referring to her alcoholism as sickness, she acknowledges that her mother’s problem is not completely her fault, as addiction is a disease people are born with, but by ending the poem by saying “that’s all you’ve ever been” the poet is asserting that her mom has a certain responsibility to get better to take care of her kids. She can see the illness in her mom and she hates the illness but she still cares enough to want to see her mom even when she sends her away.
Group 1 (Week 5) (Make up)
Poem #4: In Orbit
I like the short line breaks and general simplicity of this poem. I like the reoccurring images of circles to portray the cosmic race she’s talking about. The contrast between “The bright noon sun” & “The pale blue moon” draws further emphasis to this cosmic race, as they loop around one another. I think the poet was trying to capture a sense of love between the two planets, going as far as to say that they would die trying to get to each other. However, the reader must also note that they scientifically couldn’t ever be together, suggesting that the poem should be read as a metaphor for unattainable love. I really like the space imagery and appreciated how she referred to the two planets as “the lovers of old”. Overall, it’s beautifully written and easily interpretable, making for a simple but pleasant poem.
Poem #1: The Way Things Happen
This poem is kind of surrealist as it questions whether or not dinosaurs could still be real. “Maybe they’re just hiding like a giant game” shows an imaginative tone, but it goes deeper as she says “but who could blame them?” and expands to describe how dreadful human’s treatment of earth is. She talks about pollution comparing trees to stacks of logs and lakes to puddles of waste. She then ends to say the dinosaurs are finished. I think the reason she brings up the dinosaurs is to introduce her eco-friendly message creatively and originally, but disregards their existence at the end to show the reader that this is actually a serious poem.
Poem 4: Mr Brightside
I love the idea of making an entire poem out of song titles, especially such good songs! I was impressed by how well the poem flowed despite the interruptions of the artists names after each song title. I think it turned out beautifully, with the imagery of different cities to show how they’ve separated since graduation. I also like how he separated stanzas to draw attention to certain lines, it showed what was supposed to be emphasized.
Poem #5: Walking Among the Dinosaurs
This poem draws a lot of attention from the reader. Word choice like “rays of energy beating on flesh” in the opening line conveys to the reader that this poem is going to be intensely written. “Forest of hope” is also a heavy line, although I don’t see what it has to do with the poem. I think in line 3 she uses incorrect word choice to make a point in the following line that diction is going to be terrible, but I think she should’ve expanded that more. I like the ending line “we are never meant to settle” and how cold cut it is in comparison with the rest of poem, but I wonder what it’s connection is to the rest of the poem? To be honest, l I don’t really get this poem but it definitely caught my eye.
Group Two: Poem #4: It’s Good to Hear From You
This was by far my favorite poem that I’ve read so far in this class! I absolutely love the idea of comprisising a poem completely of text messages. I love how it starts out humoreous, alluding to face tattoos and Justin Bieber being Big Brother. I love how it begins absolutely ridiculous and slowly becomes more serious as it starts describing losing touch with people, to the point where you no longer exchange clever banter but start saying boring things like “I guess you’re too busy…” It’s very relatable as a college student to lose touch with old friends and see your old text messages and miss the sparkle you guys used to have and lost over time and new lives. The part that hit me the most however was the ending part, where the author seems to be apologizing for not being able to keep in touch. You can tell the writer is losing control of their lives and therefore themselves, as they’re failing classes and trying to take time for themselves, and it ends on the heart-stabbingly stark note that they had tried to kill themselves seven times, leaving the reader reeling. It’s so deeply relatable to any college student who’s totally overwhelmed and suicidal, yet still worried about replying to the text messages from the people who used to keep them sane. I absolutely loved this hilarious and dark work.It was absolutely perfect.
Group 2 Poems: Poem 1: Unfailing
I like the opening imagery of the wave kissing the sand no matter how many times it falls away. I like how they describe faithfulness as the way nature interacts. It progresses to further evoke a sense of relentless love, something humans are so envious of. They describe the wave’s love as “relentless, inspiration for commitment”. I also like the repetition of time allusions: “seconds pass, one after another/ never stopping as long as time goes by” to end with “never missing a second of their love”. The time allusions give the reader a greater perspective of how great that love really as, it doesn’t fade with time or lessen at any moment, it doesn’t vary or change, rather it stays constant and continues to push on and fill every single second with love. Overall the poem is quite beautiful and inspirational, but at the same time, somewhat sad because she doesn’t compare it to a love she has or a love she’s seen outside of the ocean and the sand.
Week Three- Poem #5: Poetry
This poem makes me really happy on the inside just because you can really feel the love the author has for his/her art. The way they describe the way the pen glides, the way they talk about talent covering the page, the way they describe “opening up and being yourself”. It gives art a very very beautiful connotation. I also love how it directed towards the reader because it gives the reader inspiration to go out and make something or write something. It’s super creative and awesome writing inspiration!
Week Three- Poem #4: Pressure
This poem was really good because you could really feel the anxiety of the speaker. The title “Pressure” is appropriate because it’s describing the poet’s experience in a close basketball game. The short and somewhat random line breaks gives the reader a sense of tension as they read it. The word usage also conveys a sense of anxiety or being overwhelmed from pressure. For example, the poet specifically uses the words “anxiously” and “pressure” and “buckle” when describing his feelings and emotions of the crowd throughout the short span of time he was describing. You can tell he’s talking about basketball by his word usage of “dribble” and “net”. You can also feel the pressure he feels from the crowd, as he says “for that second the whole crowd’s hearts’ stop” or “the crowd explodes”. You can tell that the poet seeks some kind of approval from the crowd as he says “This is what separates the good from the greats”. That’s how the reader knows for sure that the source of this pressure is not his parents or teammates but himself and pressure he puts on himself to be one of the greats. Overall, it’s very stark and to the point poem that conveys exactly the tone the author was working for.
Poem #3: On Light Pollution
I really like this poem because it tells the story of Andromeda in a really creative way. I admire the way the poet describes both the constellation and the myth it’s name derived from. I’m assuming in the second stanza when the poet describes Andromeda’s “hands bound to the throne, forever in the night”, he/she is referring to the constellation Andromeda, while the third stanza describing her naked and scared refers to the actual myth in which she’s chained to a rock to be sacrificed for her mother’s boasting. I do wonder however, why the poet doesn’t describe the part of the myth where Andromeda is rescued from being chained? Also, I wonder about the title, “On Light Pollution”. When she says “In a world where myths are kept encoded, Once they roamed free" is she saying that we no longer can see Andromeda’s constellation because of light pollution? Overall, I love the diction and syntax of this entire poem, as well as the interesting and creative matter behind it.
Citing: http://www.princeton.edu/~achaney/tmve/wiki100k/docs/Andromeda_(mythology).html(I didn’t remember everything about Andromeda off the top of my head.)
Week Two- Poem #4: Untitled
This poem is really heavy, but it definitely hits the heart. The poet uses anaphora when she says “I dreamt I saw my mother”, drawing the reader’s attention to the intense feelings she has about her mother. As the poem progresses the tone becomes more and more intense until it finishes with, “And I’m sorry that I cried.” You really can feel the pain she’s bearing from not having a mother around, and it makes the reader really sympathetic for the speaker. This poem is simple and stark, hits the mark perfectly, and can really draw emotion from the reader.
Poem #3: Untitled
I adore this poem, not only for it’s authenticity but for it’s almost stubborn positivity. The last lines, “smile every day, in spite of it all”, hit me the hardest because it’s so genuinely blissful. The poet portrays a sense of courage few people have. The courage to say, ”At the end of day I still have a strange fondness for my life and myself. As fucked up as it is, it’s mine.” And I love him/her for that. While the work was slightly cluttered with cliches, the beliefs that form this poet’s writing are absolutely stellar. I think Untitled could have been much better if the poet had showed more of his/her creativity and gotten a little bit more personal with the readers. Trash the phrases like “cry too frequently” and “wish on stars” and dig in that beautiful mind for things the readers haven’t read a million times. Say, "my mascara leaks too often" or "ask favors from exploded nebulae." I hope to see this artist develop his/her syntax and diction without losing his/her style; I think great things will come from them when they do!
Poem #5: Freedom
I think this poem is incredibly well-written and conveys a message that always has, and probably always will, ring true. I feel the poet’s pain, I relate to their yearnings of a more genuine, less constrictive society. I love the figurative language and use of color schemes to portray the assault critics and skeptics have on inner beauty and society as a whole. I also love the simplicity of “if only they could look to the outside, and recognize the gardens blooming around their cryptic walls”. If only the crowds were not hollowed out, too focused on their marching to feel their empty hearts, they could look out and see everything they’re ignorant to. It also reminds me of Pink Floyd’s The Wall, making it an instant favorite.